I think it's good, although the dressing states you show, may appear rather complicated at first glance to a random reader.
However, if one delves it more deeply and caresses the nub a bit, he will realise that the idea behind this knot, is neat and simple.
By flipping the collar that encircles both eye legs and getting the end of the line profile, i see it corresponds to a type of girth hitched based TIB bowline, while the proposed inline knot structure, constitutes its midline version of this very bowline. Dare i say, that the combination of two non jamming components, like a girth hitch and a crossing knot, synthesized to form your structure, is very good tactics.
This generalised methodology of feeding a loop with certain or no chirality and its continuation bight (eye), through simple basic knot structures ( girth hitch, pretzel, crossing knot e.t.c), may be regarded as a TIB eyeknot generator production.
I recall that knotsaver had developed such a method for end termination eyeknots, which could be applied for every TIB eyeknot construction.
Based on that, we can generate myriads of TIB knots, and given that we can't test them all, it might be hard to separate the good as they come.
Thanks for breeding new ideas.